篇一：201601初三英语一模部分范文
虹口区初三一模部分作文范文（一） 2016.1.15
范文1： My favourite way of communicating
My favourite way of communicating is to use Wechat. Wechat is popular among people of all ages. With it, we can talk to people all over the world at any time. For example, my brother now stays in America to further his study. Although we can’t meet each other, we can use Wechat to share our lives and talk about exciting stories which happen in our schools. That makes me feel happy. Wechat is so convenient and makes the world smaller. Besides, our life has become more colourful since Wechat appeared. In a
整体评价：
? 文章结构清晰，选材合理；
? 文章举例的事例与议论部分关联性与逻辑性较强；
? 文章句式多变，简单句与复合句相结合，彰显出作者的英语写作功底；
? 本文最后一句中划线部分Wechat改为it可避免重复。
范文2：My favourite way of communicating
With the development of the modern world, communicating with others by Wechat or e-mail becomes more and more popular. But I still prefer communicating by letters. It is no doubt that it is the best way to express our feelings and to learn about another person. When my brother went abroad, he kept in touch with me by letters. Then I found that waiting for a letter is also an enjoyable time. I’m convinced that communicating with others by letter can make people closer.
整体评价:
? 文章观点新颖。开头部分道出了当今社会的普遍现象，当读者认为作者会选择Wechat或Email来展开全文的时候，作者话锋一转说出了自己喜欢写信的原因，且情感真实； ? 文章举例的事例与议论部分过渡自然，逻辑性较强。
范文3： My favourite way of communicating communicating are becoming increasingly various. However, I prefer writing letters. I can still remember that experience when I made a new friend. At that time we promised for my heath but also very interesting. So I am convinced that I will insist on my favourite way of communicating.
整体评价:
? 文章观点新颖。与范文2 有异曲同工之妙；
? 文章第一句话的划线部分删除会使文章的开头更简练；
? 文章中划线部分receiving his letter 改为hearing from him。
范文4：My favourite way of communicating
As we all know, Wechat is one of the most popular ways of communicating in our lives. think that using mobile phone is more convenient and direct. It makes us use less time to finish more things. Also, it enables us to understand each other better. That’s my favourite way of communicating.
整体评价:
? 文章情感真实，事例贴近实际生活，且议论部分与叙述部分关联性较高；
? 划线部分using mobile phones不妥因为微信也是使用手机，此处改为making phone calls
更好；
? emergent thing 这个词才大了，改为urgent更为贴切；
? 划线部分没有表达清楚，改为it was too complex to explain everything by typing many
words更好。
范文5：My favourite way of communicating
With the development of technology, we have different ways of communicating. I prefer to using E-mails. My sister went to Australia five years ago. At first, I didn’t know how to contact her and I was really upset. However, she told me that I could send an email to her. I like to use emails to communicate with others for many important reasons. First, it is convenient and fast. It enables me to communicate with my sister though we are miles away from each other. It makes me feel closer to my sister. In addition, It is free. I have to admit that sending emails is my favourite way of communicating.
整体评价:
? 文章事例情感真实，表达恰当，句型富有变化。
范文6：My favourite way of communicating
There are many ways of communicating such as QQ, MSN and Wechat. Among them, I like Wechat best. I went to Beijing last month. It was so beautiful that I wanted to share the views with my friends. I took the photos and sent them to my friends What’s more, it is free. In a word, Wechat is my favourite way of communicating.
整体评价：
? 文章结构清晰，选材合理，语言简练；
? 划线句在议论部分显得有些突然，可以做如下修改：I can also speak to my parents and
friends easily through Wechat. 更突出convenient这一论点。
篇二：范文汇总-2015年初三一模-八佰伴初小英语
2015年上海初三一模试卷英语作文范文汇总
--八佰伴
宝山区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Recently there has been a discussion about the topic “Water Is Precious” in your class.
Please write at Host 60 words about the topic "Water Is Precious" to express your point of
view,(请以“水是珍贵的”写一篇至少60词的作文，标点符号不占格）
(你的作文内容须包含以下几点)
1）Why is water very important in our life?
2）What are the causes of the water shortage?
3）How can we protect our precious water resources?
范文（1）
Water is precious
Undoubtedly , no man can live without water. When we begin the new day, we need water to drink, wash things, work. Farmers need water to make the crop grow healthily. The factory needs water to process the production. Animals need water to live their lives.
However, polluting and wasting make precious water less and less. Some immediate actions must be taken to protect water resources. As students, we should have the sense of saving water. Saving a little day by day, it would make a big influence on protecting water. Given all of its importance and urgency, we must spare no effort to do what I have suggested you.
范文（2）
Water is precious
Water is the birthplace of life and it plays an indispensable part in our daily life，so water is very vital for us human. Although the ocean covers 71% of the surface of the earth ,there are many people who can’t get access to water in the world. But how can this be?
Above all, the water shortage results from the huge number of people on the world who take it for granted using the water immoderately. Another reason for water scarcity is water pollution caused by farming and chemistry industry.
Facing these two main reasons, we are supposed to save water in our daily life and reuse it. Only in this way can we protect our precious water resources.
崇明县2014-2015学年度第一学期教学质量调研测试卷
初三英语
Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic "Changes in my school".(以“学校发生的变化”
为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)
(注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)
Use the fallowing points as a reference(以下提示仅供参考)
-----What changes have taken place in your school?
-----What do you think of these changes?
(注意:文中不得出现任何姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)
范文（1）
With the rapid development of society and economy, a great number of changes have taken place in my school in the past few years. It's my honor to tell you the changes of my school.
On one hand, my school is much bigger than before. When you walk around my school, you will see several new
teaching buildings and modern labs surrounded by various beautiful flowers and trees. In addition, the playground has been rebuilt into a larger one for students to play games. After class, students can play and relax themselves there.
On the other hand, after realizing the importance of knowledge, students also have made up their minds to study harder than before.
Generally speaking, my school is becoming more beautiful, more modern and much better. All teachers as well as students are very pleased with these changes.
范文（2）
When it comes to the changes，I can’t help thinking of my school. It used to be simple and rude. However, currently, great changes have taken place.
Walking along the road in my school, you can see the green grass ,enjoy the beautiful flowers and breathe the fresh air. Move forward, your eyes will be caught by the splendid library, which is the remarkable building of my school. On your left hand, there is a my class building which is about two times as tall as the older one, reaching 20meters.Opposed to the class building, there lies the playground, where I can have my PE class and do exercise in my spare time.
Do you want know more about the changes in my school, come and have a look in person.
闵行区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Learning to be polite ”. (以“学会礼貌”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)
提示：某英语报社正在举办“学会礼貌”的征文活动。请你以“学会礼貌”为题写一篇不少于60词的短文，谈谈你对礼貌的理解；请列举至少三个不礼貌的行为，并谈谈怎样才能成为有礼貌的人。
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名，校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）
The following phrases are for reference only. (以下短语仅供参考)
laugh at make noise smoke in public
give a seat to… keep quiet be friendly (helpful…)
范文（1）
As we know, with the development of the society, politeness becomes more and more important.
What is politeness? In my opinion, politeness is a good quality that everyone should have. Someone may not know how to be polite. There are some impolite things that we can not do. For example, it is impolite to laught at others, make nosie and smoke in public. We should give a seat to people in need. It is necessary to keep quiet in public area. What is more, being friendly to others is necessary.
奉贤区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Writing (作文): (共20分)
Write a letter in at least 60 words according to the given situation (根据所给情景写一封不少于60词的信)
假如你是王芳，最近你收到了你好朋友Ann的信。她正为她的学习而烦恼。请你根据她的信写一封回信，给她一些建议。（注意：建议不得少于两条）
Words and phrasesfor reference （以下短语仅供参考）
Improve；I suggest that ...; useful methods; be relaxed;
(注意：1. 开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数 2. 短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分)
范文（1）
Dear Wang Fang,
I’m so worried about my study. I understand what the teacher says, but i forget most of it after class. Could you please give me some advice?
Yours,
Ann
Dear Ann,
Nice to hear from you. I have learned that you’re worrying about your study, but what I want to say is just do your best and never give it up easliy. Here are some useful methods I give to you to help you improve your study. Firstly, please preview the lessons you’ll learn and take notes while you’re having class,which can help you to strengthen the language points. Secondly, if you have some questions, you can ask your teacher or classmates as soon as possible,never leave them till tomorrow. Last but not least, always review the lessons regularly and relax yourself in spare time. After all , keeping a energetic mood and a balanced condition is also a good way to help you study efficiently.Believe yourself, and you’ll be more and more confident in study.
Yours,
Wang Fang
范文（2）
Dear Ann,
Nice to hear from you.
I am sorry to hear that you have trouble in your lessons. First , I want to tell you that you need not worry much about that.. Take it easy. Here are some useful advice for you . I think it will improve you situation.
I suggest that you should listen to your teacher carefully in class and take notes. If time is limited, you can use some simple words to help you remember some key points. Then after class, you must go over them in time. In my point view, it is a useful method. What is more, you should relax yourself after you finish your homework, as we all know, only we have a good rest, we can work efficiently. So you should make a balance between study and entertainment. I believe you .Yours, Wang Fang
黄浦区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Writing(作文)：（共20分）
Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “I’m not … any more”. (以“我不再……”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文， 标点符号不占格。)
要求：
? 补全作文标题。
? 短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。
? 范文（1）
How time flies. After three years gains with pains in junior high school, now I’m so proud that I’m not a coward
girl any more.
Still I remember the first PE lesson when I stood alone in the playground, not daring to come towards anybody to play with them. I was so coward! That night, Mum encouraged me to greet everyone the next day. Hard as it was to me, I tried and got warm responses surprisingly! From then on, I always remind myself not to think negatively before I try. Like magic, my courage has brought me good friends, third prize on Campus Speech Contest and even a chance to give a speech in Shanghai Children’s Art Center!
With the courage, I’m confident to greet the challenge ahead in life
范文（2）
I am not lonely any more
I am not lonely any more after I take part in music club. There is no doubt that it gives me much fun. And I make many friends and they are very friendly to me. Not only I learn to how to enjoy myself but also I become outgoing.
The club usually holds some activities. There are all kinds of people to attend. Here I can meet many people. They all like music and they can sing well. I like listening to them. The beauty of songs is beyond description. So, as long as you have time, welcome to our club, it cannot be let you down. It is worth coming and attending . I like it.
嘉定区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Writing (20%)
Write at least 60 words about the topic “Something I should never do”. （以“我不应该做的事情”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）
遵纪守法是每个人应尽的责任和义务，作为一名中学生，不应该做违法校纪校规的事情，比如考试作弊、抄袭他人作业、说谎等，请谈谈你的观点和理由。
Phrases for reference（以下短语仅供参考）
obey the school rules cheat in the exams
copy others’ homeworkbe honest
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分）
范文（1）
It is widely accepted that a student should obey the school rules. Among the rules, the last one I will disobey is to cheat in the exams. To begin with, taking exams makes me learn about the knowledge which I haven’t grasped. So it is the knowledge I hasn’t grasped rather than the grade that I should pay attention to. What’s more, cheating in the exams is a dishonest behavior which will disappoint both your parents and your teacher. In conclusion, the only way we can make progress in our study is to work hard instead of cheating in the exam.
金山区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Writing(作文)：（共20分）
Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “One problem /question I met in my English study”. according to the situation given (请根据所给情形，以“我在英语学习中碰到的一个问题”为题，写一篇不少于60个字的短文。要求内容切题、语言地道、表达流畅)
情境： 每个人在自己的英语学习过程中总会碰到这样那样的问题。你碰到过怎样的问题？你解决了
这个问题吗？如果解决了，你认为你的解决方案怎么样？如果没有解决，你认为是什么原因？以后会用什么更好的方法？
以下词或词组供参考
can(not), understand, (don’t) know, read…correctly, remember, write, ask
(注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分)
范文（1）
I used to be poor at English. The biggest problem was that I was afaid of communicate with others in English.I couldn’t
understand others correctly, while others didn’t know what I said,either. So I was geting more and more nervous when I met forigeners.
I asked my friends how to learn English or what methods I can use when studying English. They told me they studied English in several ways. One was to attend English class, listening to the teacher’s lecture and writing down some important notes. Second, They always reviewed their lessons. They recited the new words and did homework required by the teacher. They also listened to the tape to practice their listening and talked with foreigners to improve their oral English. Sometimes, they watched English film and learn cultures of this language.
Step by step, I feel my English improved very fast. I like English now and I made many friends from English spoken countries.
静安区2014-2015学年度第一学期期末质量抽查试卷
初三英语
Writing （作文） （共20分）
Write at least 60 words about the topic “Growing up with good books”. （请以“好书伴我成长”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
（注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）
Situation for your reference:
Nowadays we often talk a lot about reading, especially reading good books. What are good books in your eyes? And what advantages can we get from reading them? Please show us your own understanding and experience of reading good books.
范文（1）
Reading has been in my life for many years and has helped me to learnt a lot. When I was five years old, I became interested in reading books. It can not only kill the time, but also, more importantly, help me to improve myself. I like reading books because there are a lot of useful things in books. I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books can also teach me how to be a good person. Books even can solve many problems for me. I will read more good books to improve myself
范文（2） Everybody reads books, but not all of them can find enjoyment and pleasure from books. Reading books can not only relax me, but bring me happiness as well. Very often reading keeps the balance between work and leisure when I face difficult problems. I usually read a book for a while, and try to know a kind of spirit and wisdom from different characters. No doubt it is a good choice to get fun. All in all, I always learn a lot from books. Thus, books are a source of my endless happiness.
浦东一模英语作文
94 Write at least 60 words about the topic “I get ______from my class life “(以我从班级生活中得到_____”为题，写一篇
篇三：2013年上海市初三英语一模作文
长宁
As we all know, happiness is one of the most important things in our lives. Therefore, learning how to be happy is becoming more and more useful to us. And here is some advice for us to be happy people.
In the first place, keep ourselves healthy. Only when we have health bodies, we can enjoy a lot of interesting things and be in a good mood. In the second place, we need to put our heart into the things that we are doing. As long as we fix our mind on our work, we will find happiness in it and know that happiness is just around us. Most important of all enjoy the life every day instead of complaining of how hard it is. Follow my advice, and soon you will find that you are just in happiness.
崇明
The spring Festival is coming and I have made a detailed plan for it. In this winter holiday, I want to polish my English. Compared with some top students’ English, my English is not very good in my class. If want to catch up with them, I must take advantage of this holiday to fill the gap between them and me. Still, I also want to visit my grandparents in Sichuan, who are very old now and have given me a lot of
love and care. I think it will refresh me to stay with them for a while.
静安区
Today, I interviewed jenny, chief editor of our school newspaper. Jenny is an active girl who has various interests including dancing. No wonder (难怪) she looks so healthy and is in a good shape.
Jenny’s parents has a great influence on her because both of them are famous writers. When she was a little child, she had an ambition to be a world famous writer. Because of her hard work, jenny won an award in writing in 2010. now she is working for our school newspaper. Her articles always appear on the first page of each issue(of newspaper). Jenny, an ambitious girl, is really a promising writer around us. 徐汇区
I quite agree with Eric Schmidt on his advice. I think we should put down the devices in our hands and go back to the real world at once.
Nowadays, with the fast development of science and technology, more and more electronic devices are coming into our life and people also are spending more and more time on them. Take my own experience as an example. Last
week, I invited my classmates to celebrate my birthday party, but at the party, almost all of them were using their electronic products to surf the internet, play games, or write blogs. What a shame it was! If we could stay away from the electronic devices and have more time to talk face-to-face with our friends and parents, what a wonderful life it would be!
普陀区
Dear classmates，
As proverb goes, books are the ladder of human’s progress. However in our class, most of you, unlike top students, often play computer games instead of reading books during your spare time. There are many advantages of reading books, on one hand it can eich our knowledge that can’t be learned from classes, on the other hand, it will open our mind to the wider outside world. In my opinion, reading is just like making friends, few but good. All in all, as junior school students, we should get into the good habit of reading books every day.
宝山
It a common belief that we can’t depend on our parents forever, therefore, my viewpoint is that we should go to a boarding school,
First of all, we can learn to be independent if we study in a boarding
school and therefore our parents will not worry about us so much in the future life. What’s more, we can make friends and push ahead the friendship in such an environment. In a word, it all depends on ourselves whether we should go or not.
A recent survey shows that 70% of the students have so much homework that they have to burn the midnight oil to finish it. This, however, has done harm to teenagers’ health. Undoubtedly, a certain amount of homework can help enhance their study at school. But with too much homework, students tend to get anxious and tired. Also, they are easy to feel sleepy because of the lack of sleeping time. As a result, they can’t get focused in class. Therefore, instead of doing loads of homework, students should be given more time to do outdoor activities and develop their interests and hobbies. Thus, they can be healthy both physically and mentally.
作文解析：黄浦区作文还是以议论文为思路。当然出题还是在学生可写的可控范围，不离生活和学习。但是要以辩证性的思维写出作业多少以及对自己生活学习的影响，这对学生稍许有些挑战。议论文的思路也可以借鉴我们读写课上老师讲的以数据引入话题。再阐述现象，以及现象带来的结果，最后再总结自己的观点，适当升华主题。因此，对广大学员来说，挑战之一就是如何避免假大空的论点，不要千篇一律的I think进行所谓的“老干部发言”，是非常重要的。
范文解析：开篇数据例证，说明heavy homework带来的直观影响：“do harm to”;进一步阐述作业量过多造成的危害，在表达时，语句之间的连贯性和逻辑性是非常重要的，因此，这里的undoubtedly, also, therefore, but, thus,等等都是过渡或者深入文章表达的必备的方法。当然，这需要平时积极的练习，只有在平时磨枪，才会临阵不慌。文采分词汇分享： burn the midnight oil ；do harm to, enhance, tend do, lack of, 最后的Physically and mentally也是押韵词，读上去朗朗上口，给人印象深刻
。
Eric Schmidt, Google chairman, made a speech at Boston University and gave some meaningful advice to the students, asking them to stay away from electronic devices and to have more time to talk face-to-face with their friends and parents.
Eric Schmidt谷歌公司主席在波士顿大学的演讲中建议学生不要沉迷于电子设备二要留出更多时间和朋友家长面对面交谈。请你就Eric Schmidt的建议结合你或者你身边同学朋友的实际情况谈谈你的看法。 Suggested questions：
1. Do you or your friends spend much time on electronic d(转载自：www.dXf5.cOm 东星资源网:初三英语一模作文)evices, such as ?? 2. What do you think of his advice? Do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that teenagers like me do spend more and more time on various electronic devices such as iPads, PSPs, iPhones. Eric Schmidt’s words just keep ringing around my ears, reminding me of my friend who was hit by a bike while
checking his text messages on the road. Standing on Eric’s side, I think electronic devices should not take the place of face-to-face communication. In fact, people are starting to spend some off-screen time with their families and friends. In a word, remember not to be kidnapped by your phone and forget your beloved ones. (104)
本次一模作文出题有两点比较新：一是题干很长，而且有suggested questions， 二是题材偏向议论。当然，这也并不是说本次中考就会偏向议论，对于考生来说，2013年，我的写作要更加全面。
这里笔者奉献的范文没有什么超出中考考纲范围的词汇，但是其中有几个亮点：亮点一,开头句使用同位语从句，there is no doubt that结构。亮点二，keep ringing around my ears 比较形象，语言简单但是印象深刻。亮点三，现在分词作伴随状语 reminding结构后面紧跟who引导的定语从句。亮点四，off-screen time是相老师在2012年讲过的in词，这里使用会让考官觉得非常新颖，当然有风险，如果碰到不懂的老师。一模使用可以，中考使用要谨慎。亮点五，最后煽情一句,呼唤人文。